Friday, June 7, 2013

In The Hand of a Child

I am so flippin' busy and am so tired but, I have missed having the time to create so, here is my entry in this weekend's Trifextra challenge.  As always, your comments are appreciated.  :)


In The Hand of a Child



In his father's chest, a charred and bloody hole.

In the hand of the child, a gun, 
                                                       a wisp of smoke escaping the barrel.

In the eyes of the child, a lifetime of pain washed clean in torrent of tears.

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    1. Thank you, Kate. It felt good to write again.

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  2. Oh wow, Tom! Really powerful stuff here. Excellent job!

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    1. Thank you, Suzanne. Your words are most gratefully accepted and appreciated. :)

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  3. Oh, how terribly sad!

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    1. One of the very first non-fiction books I ever read was called, "Life With Billy" by Brain Vallee, I believe. It was about a Nova Scotia woman who was standing trial for murdering her husband. During the trial, details of the horrific and sadist abuse she had suffered at his hands came to light. The debate about her crime then shifted to whether or not the taking of someone's life is ever justifiable. In this case, the consensus was that the abuse was so extreme and cruel that, in the end, no one could really blame her for her act; that it was, ultimately, self-defense.......even though Billy was drunk and passed out in his truck when she used a shotgun to blow his head clean off of his shoulders.
      I was thinking of her and, of the many other types of victims who have suffered torment of one sort or another and have lived to fight back, when I chose to write this piece. God Bless all of the survivors. <3

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  4. Powerful words you used to depict this sad story!

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  5. Thank you, Janna. It feels good to tell a tale again. :)

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  6. This is crazy-powerful and hits right in the gut.

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  7. "Crazy powerful".....Wow! Thanks, Draug! :)

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  8. A whole lot is said here in just a few sentences. Well done. It is true, this is very powerful writing.

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    1. Such praise from a great writer like you means a lot! Thanks for stopping by to check out my work. :)

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  9. Well, you weren't kidding, at the hands of babes...Who knew we'd write something similar?

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    1. Told ya! :) Thanks for taking the time to stop by and say hello.

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  10. Very strong piece of writing. A whole, very sad story.

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  11. Sad and empowering, tyrants can't always expect their subjugated to continue to suffer.

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    1. They might like to think they can but, you are right, in a perfect world, they can't

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  12. That wisp of smoke was brutal. (and, hey!)

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  13. That child could be any age, too. Good one.

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  14. Powerful as well as a chilling three sentences.

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    1. Thank you, Sir. I appreciate your comments very much. :)

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