Saturday, February 23, 2013

Give Life Wings

This weekend's Trifextra challenge was to take the words on page 33 of a book entitled, Olive Kitteridge  and create a story, poem or some other piece of writing.



Here is my attempt. Please enjoy.



Give Life Wings

The children are arriving
on Puckerbrush Island.
Carried on a swing set
in the gentle breeze.
Woods discovered.
Starflowers collected.
Standing quietly at the water's edge.
Mother said, "Look. Fish."

Give life wings.

34 comments:

  1. Very cool, Tom. Uplifting. Lovely.

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    1. Thanks, Steph. After writing about a pedophile last weekend......... :)

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  2. This is pretty! It's like a perfect picture of childhood (:

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    1. Thanks, Draug! The opposite of "The Victorwalk" from last weekend.

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  3. Beautifully done. Picture perfect

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  4. A masterly demonstration of short, pithy sentences carrying a lot of meaning. I can learn a lot from it!

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    1. You are more than welcome to peruse the rest of my posts and leave comments such as this one on those posts, too! Thanks a lot for the very generous words of praise. :)

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  5. Lovely use of the prompt Tom! Brings back fond memories. :)

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    1. The simple pleasures of helping kids discover the beauty and wonder of Nature. Thanks for your kind words. :)

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  6. Wow. I love this one, too. This is really, really beautiful, Tom.

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    1. This weekend's prompt is bringing out a lot of good writing in a lot of people! Glad you feel that mind is worthy of being included in such fine company.

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  7. very nice - I feel like being tucked in for bed now (which should be soon anyway) :)

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    1. I have all sorts of lines swimming in my head but, for now, I will simply say thank you and sweet dreams. :)

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  8. awww you've painted such a pretty picture with your words. :)

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  9. Thanks, my friend. Life is beautiful when viewed with the right mindset.

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  10. This reminds me of a song my mother would sing to me about babies swinging from trees in the breeze and caught before being snuggled into bed. Very sweet. Thank you for your sweet words regarding my post ... much appreciated!

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    1. I say, "Thank you" and "You're welcome". I love writing what I write, reading what everyone else writes and commenting back and forth, too. The whole Trifecta model, I suppose, is pretty enjoyable. :)

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  11. Beautiful poem. You defied the word limitation. Great job!

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    1. I didn't find the word limit to be problematic. It was more a question of whether to go dark (as so many have), to go light (as I did) or something else, altogether (as KZ did, for example.) Actually, I enjoyed this prompt.

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  12. Like a sweet childhood memory from a day at the beach. Very nice.

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  13. Yes indeed! Last weekend was nightmarish childhood memories. This weekend, a walk on the nice side. Thanks for your comments, Tara!

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  14. I love it! This was such an uplifting reshape considering the darkness of the scene in the book.

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    1. Going dark was the obvious first option....and, many have gone just that way but, I went dark last weekend so, I didn't want that again. Fortunately, the words that were available lent themselves to other expressions so, there you go. Life can be beautiful or it can be misery; it all depends on how one looks at it, I suppose. My glass is half full. :) Thanks for your comments.

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  15. Oh - I see where I went wrong now... D'oh!

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  16. Great word portrait-loved it:-)

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    1. Word portrait? I think I like that description. Thank you. :)

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  17. Took me to the hillside full of cabins overlooking the lake at summer camp. Love the title, too!

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  18. Thank you. I like the title, too! :) Glad you were able to link up in time.

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  19. A great choice of words, beautifully put together.

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  20. that quote about children and roots /wings...it was so perfect here.
    your choices for this drew such a heartwarming picture.

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  21. I'm a heartwarming kinda guy, what can I tellya! :). Thanks for stopping in to say heelo, Kir.

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