This weekend's Trifextra challenge is to use the word, tooth, in any way our little hearts desire except, that it not be about losing a tooth. Ok. Fair enough. My entry is not about losing a tooth.
Listen to Teeth*
He kneels,
Tracing the familiar lines
Of this path well-travelled.
His partner unzips.
All lips and longing,
A master of tongue and tooth,
His tears dissolve
amid the rivulets
of this lover's dew.
*"Listen to Teeth" is a line from this great song
called Lover's Spit by one of my favourite
Canadian bands, Broken Social Scene.
Well, my goodness. Powerful elixir noted!
ReplyDeleteWonderfully woven scene. Very, very well done :))
Thanks, Jo-Anne. Hard to fit a whole scene in 33 words but, I gave it my best shot. Thanks, as always, for your support. :)
DeleteA comment like this is better than being in the Winner's circle. Thank you ever so much, Jo-Anne. Your heart is very kind. <3
DeleteBeautiful, and surely not about losing teeth!
ReplyDeleteSurely not. :) Glad you found it beautiful. I've always really, really liked this song and the images that flow from it. I think it is beautiful, too.
ReplyDeleteCertainly not about losing teeth. I nearly spit out my coffee! Well-played, sir.
ReplyDeleteDon't spit out your coffee, Tina, for Heaven's sake! :) Glad my post caught your attention.
DeleteTom! I'm blushing just reading this! It is lovely though. Certainly a unique use of the prompt.
ReplyDeleteI am happy to bring colour to your cheeks!
ReplyDeleteWe're seeing many different writing sides of you lately. Love the show of range and subjects. Thank you for linking up!
ReplyDeleteThank you, folks! Can't get better if I don't step further away from the nest. :) Your support and encouragement is appreciated.
DeleteWarning! Saber-toothed tiger on the loose...whew!
ReplyDeleteThe things one can do with a gentle grazing of a tooth. :)
DeleteExcuse me Tom, while I go and turn my air conditioner up to high now! This was hot!
ReplyDeleteGlad to get you all hot n' bothered! :)
ReplyDeleteThis was hot... really good.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Bjorn! :)
DeleteYes, a hot one... but also a very good take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Gabriella. I appreciate your very kind words. :)
DeleteHoly @&$*%!
ReplyDeleteWhy do I suddenly feel the need to smoke a cigarette and cuddle? :)
Was NOT expecting that. Very sexy take on the prompt!
Glad that you....well........um............enjoyed this as much as I did. :) Thanks for the most awesome of comments!
ReplyDeleteI like this one.
ReplyDeleteGlad to hear it. Thanks for popping on by, Jenna! :)
DeleteNicely written - love how you used 'tooth' in this.
ReplyDeleteI am sure that the "partner" loved how tooth was used, too. :) Thanks for your comments.
ReplyDeleteYes, I read all 33 words and felt very uncomfortable. lol. My issues. Really well done...convey a scene. Felt my cheeks get red too. Was hoping zip up had another meaning. hahaha
ReplyDeleteSorry if you felt uncomfortable. In the end, it is a story about someone longing for meaning while engaging in meaningless acts.........and then, realizing the error of his ways but, realizing too late.
ReplyDeleteIt is a sex scene but, in reality, the sex has nothing to do with it. It is the backdrop against which the bigger story is being told. Thanks for your honest commentary, Maggie. I appreciate your presence on my blog. :)
I loved the contrast of the heat of the moment and the eloquence of the last line, showing both the physical and emotional impact of sexual contact.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your kind comments. I was going to an example of someone who is in the midst of realizing that random encounters are no longer cutting it and that he wants something more from his life and his partner. Thanks for noticing what I was going after. :)
DeleteOh wow, Tom. This is beautiful and very moving. Definitely not about losing a tooth. ;)
ReplyDeleteGlad you saw the beauty, Suzanne. Thank you very much for your comments. :)
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