Saturday, February 23, 2013

Give Life Wings

This weekend's Trifextra challenge was to take the words on page 33 of a book entitled, Olive Kitteridge  and create a story, poem or some other piece of writing.



Here is my attempt. Please enjoy.



Give Life Wings

The children are arriving
on Puckerbrush Island.
Carried on a swing set
in the gentle breeze.
Woods discovered.
Starflowers collected.
Standing quietly at the water's edge.
Mother said, "Look. Fish."

Give life wings.

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34 comments:

  1. stephFebruary 23, 2013 at 12:22 PM

    Very cool, Tom. Uplifting. Lovely.

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    1. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 23, 2013 at 10:24 PM

      Thanks, Steph. After writing about a pedophile last weekend......... :)

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  2. DraugFebruary 23, 2013 at 1:00 PM

    This is pretty! It's like a perfect picture of childhood (:

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    1. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 23, 2013 at 10:25 PM

      Thanks, Draug! The opposite of "The Victorwalk" from last weekend.

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  3. barbaraFebruary 23, 2013 at 1:44 PM

    Beautifully done. Picture perfect

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  4. ColonialistFebruary 23, 2013 at 3:43 PM

    A masterly demonstration of short, pithy sentences carrying a lot of meaning. I can learn a lot from it!

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    1. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 23, 2013 at 10:27 PM

      You are more than welcome to peruse the rest of my posts and leave comments such as this one on those posts, too! Thanks a lot for the very generous words of praise. :)

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  5. SuzanneFebruary 23, 2013 at 5:18 PM

    Lovely use of the prompt Tom! Brings back fond memories. :)

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    1. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 23, 2013 at 10:28 PM

      The simple pleasures of helping kids discover the beauty and wonder of Nature. Thanks for your kind words. :)

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  6. TrifectaFebruary 23, 2013 at 6:53 PM

    Wow. I love this one, too. This is really, really beautiful, Tom.

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    1. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 23, 2013 at 10:29 PM

      This weekend's prompt is bringing out a lot of good writing in a lot of people! Glad you feel that mind is worthy of being included in such fine company.

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  7. AnonymousFebruary 23, 2013 at 8:07 PM

    very nice - I feel like being tucked in for bed now (which should be soon anyway) :)

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    1. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 23, 2013 at 10:30 PM

      I have all sorts of lines swimming in my head but, for now, I will simply say thank you and sweet dreams. :)

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  8. AnonymousFebruary 23, 2013 at 10:51 PM

    awww you've painted such a pretty picture with your words. :)

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  9. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 23, 2013 at 11:05 PM

    Thanks, my friend. Life is beautiful when viewed with the right mindset.

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  10. MorganFebruary 24, 2013 at 12:29 AM

    This reminds me of a song my mother would sing to me about babies swinging from trees in the breeze and caught before being snuggled into bed. Very sweet. Thank you for your sweet words regarding my post ... much appreciated!

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    1. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 24, 2013 at 10:04 AM

      I say, "Thank you" and "You're welcome". I love writing what I write, reading what everyone else writes and commenting back and forth, too. The whole Trifecta model, I suppose, is pretty enjoyable. :)

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  11. lumdog2012February 24, 2013 at 9:45 AM

    Beautiful poem. You defied the word limitation. Great job!

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    1. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 24, 2013 at 10:07 AM

      I didn't find the word limit to be problematic. It was more a question of whether to go dark (as so many have), to go light (as I did) or something else, altogether (as KZ did, for example.) Actually, I enjoyed this prompt.

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  12. Tara R.February 24, 2013 at 10:30 AM

    Like a sweet childhood memory from a day at the beach. Very nice.

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  13. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 24, 2013 at 10:48 AM

    Yes indeed! Last weekend was nightmarish childhood memories. This weekend, a walk on the nice side. Thanks for your comments, Tara!

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  14. Kenya G. JohnsonFebruary 24, 2013 at 1:06 PM

    I love it! This was such an uplifting reshape considering the darkness of the scene in the book.

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    1. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 24, 2013 at 3:31 PM

      Going dark was the obvious first option....and, many have gone just that way but, I went dark last weekend so, I didn't want that again. Fortunately, the words that were available lent themselves to other expressions so, there you go. Life can be beautiful or it can be misery; it all depends on how one looks at it, I suppose. My glass is half full. :) Thanks for your comments.

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  15. AnonymousFebruary 24, 2013 at 1:53 PM

    Oh - I see where I went wrong now... D'oh!

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  16. AtreyeeFebruary 24, 2013 at 5:06 PM

    Great word portrait-loved it:-)

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    1. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 24, 2013 at 7:19 PM

      Word portrait? I think I like that description. Thank you. :)

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  17. kymmFebruary 25, 2013 at 6:16 AM

    Took me to the hillside full of cabins overlooking the lake at summer camp. Love the title, too!

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  18. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 25, 2013 at 9:08 AM

    Thank you. I like the title, too! :) Glad you were able to link up in time.

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  19. AnonymousFebruary 25, 2013 at 3:00 PM

    A great choice of words, beautifully put together.

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  20. KirFebruary 25, 2013 at 3:57 PM

    that quote about children and roots /wings...it was so perfect here.
    your choices for this drew such a heartwarming picture.

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  21. Thomas Charles MacInnesFebruary 25, 2013 at 9:10 PM

    I'm a heartwarming kinda guy, what can I tellya! :). Thanks for stopping in to say heelo, Kir.

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