This week's Trifecta challenge is, in fact, a TrifeXXXtra erotic challenge. As stated by Trifecta in the challenge guidelines, writing erotica isn't that easy. Far too often, it devolves into cheesy porn or rote play-by-play. In either case, that was not where I wanted my submission to go. I'm not sure if my story will come across as wimping out or as being what I wanted it to be, which was the leap of faith when you give yourself physically to urges or circumstances that are greater than you. Anyway, you are better judges of this than I so, enjoy it for what its' worth.
The Porch Light Glow
She was young when she married old. At the time, a father figure, perhaps. But now, years later, more a Rockwellian patriarch. Admittedly, she had no complaints to make. In his eyes, she was always his princess. A kiss on the cheek each morning before work and each night before sleep. He called her, “Dear” and his heart filled at the sight of her.
With supper ended, she imagined him sitting contentedly in his chair, reading glasses perched at the end of his nose, taking in the day’s events in the local papers, laughing to himself at the foolish things some people do. Filing tidbits of gossip away like a bird pecking at seed, waiting to share it all with her over a hot cup of tea before bed. She thought of his goodness, his gentleness and she smiled. The gentleman at the bar believed the smile for him and, perhaps it was. She accepted a drink. In her mind, it already felt like cheating.
Years spent with her husband had conditioned her line of sight to conform to his body type. The height of his shoulders, the length of his legs, the roundness of his belly. Now she looked into the eyes of a much younger, fitter man. When he leaned in closer, his body filled her vision completely, melting the rest of her world away. Words poured from his lips like honey. When he lightly brushed a lock of her hair aside to better see her eyes, the whole of her insides quaked and rocked. She prayed that her reaction wasn’t too obvious from where he stood. But, from his smile and small chuckle, she knew that it had. With quick assurance, he tossed the barkeep some money.
At home, tea finished, her husband prepared for bed. Concerned only for her safety, he left the porch light on.
At that same moment, her suitor extended to her an invitation to a long-forgotten world, by simply extending his hand to hers.
I have to admit when I saw your banner and your profile picture I was afraid for you to write cheesy porn ;-) I love your simply romantic piece. It fits here, you didn't wimp out - I'd say you stayed true to yourself.
ReplyDeleteLovely. Just lovely.
ReplyDeleteNow I'm ashamed of my cheesy porn haha This is really wonderful. I don't think you took the chicken way out! You just interpreted it differently--and beautifully!
ReplyDeleteThanks folks. Now I'm going to be inundated with "cheese" jokes, eh? Fair enough. I deserve that.
ReplyDeleteI guess what I was attempting to say is that, after how well received Gina and Lumdog' collaboration was during the Anniversary Challenge, my sense was that folks were in the mood for stories revolving around sweaty, steamy, sex-infused encounters. I attempted a few variations along those lines and the "cheese" factor always ended up quite high. So, while I can say fuck, nipples, clit, cock, dick, cum, thrust, ass, etc. just like anyone else, it really isn't being true to myself to write that way. So, you get more of a Harlequin Romance story out of me in the end. Hope everyone else enjoys my story, even though it may be the tamest XXX in history. :)
I liked this.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Much appreciated.
ReplyDeleteA woman following her fantasy..I enjoyed the subtle eroticism.
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